Thrust backwards by the force of hate,
Relinquishing power over twisted limbs,
Sweat and blood soaking into salty wounds,
Fury etched into a face, fading as the light dims.
Sharp intakes of breath; ruby streams released.
Pain trickles, final beats echo, a soul left to rot.
Lifeless eyes mirror shock; color gradually drained,
Adoration shattered; you killed me in one shot.
I liked it, but I felt like the lines could have had a little more description in them to help the reader full see what is going on. The imagery was great and did help me, but a little more description would make it better so that the end isn`t just thrown in there and so sudden.
But, the imagery, wording and flow were all very good.
This poem is amazing! The detail and imagery in it is outstanding. Almost like the reader(me) were there watching the whole thing, if that makes any sense to you. Either way this is a very powerful poem. Keep up the good work.