"The air is getting cold and crisp
Time to zip up jackets and coats"
- These two lines (as well as the 2 lines in the second stanza) are proof to me that people can pull of a good poem with a lot of 'and's' close together. Usually I can't stand that because it doesn't seem poetic. But sometimes, such as this time, people can pull it off.
One thing I noticed wrong with the poem, or wrong to me. Was that you said 'heading down south to the summer'. While that is correct, they are heading TO summer, I find it a bit more simple to say 'for the summer'. Of course that's a phrase used quite often and you may want your own 'phrase' here.
Good poem, Gem. You have exceptional talent.
As I'm sure you're well aware of.
I love nature poems, but I'm not any good at writing it. You, I must say, have a talent for them. Your description here is so well written, and the flow was well done, yet again. Well done on a great poem. :]
The whole feel of this piece is so relaxing and calm. Very serene....and QUIT SAYING MEH!!!lol! :) I mean seriously, you could recite the alphabet and you'd get 15 or 20 comments on it! Lol!!! You're work is incredible, Gem. You are a fantastic poet and I can't wait to read more! :)