Autumn Walks

by Gem   Sep 17, 2007

The air is getting cold and crisp
Time to zip up jackets and coats
Autumn walks down through the park
Watching leaves on the lake float

Beautiful colours of brown and gold
With hints of orange and reds
Swirling gently to the ground
To the paths and flower beds

The birds are gathering in the air
Getting ready to spread their wings
Heading down South to the summer
Before the winter chill sets in

Autumn walks down through the park
Tranquility and peace
Watching leaves twirl to the ground
Is a pleasant and sweet release


(Meh.. >_< )


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  • 9 years ago

    by Teria

    "The air is getting cold and crisp
    Time to zip up jackets and coats"
    - These two lines (as well as the 2 lines in the second stanza) are proof to me that people can pull of a good poem with a lot of 'and's' close together. Usually I can't stand that because it doesn't seem poetic. But sometimes, such as this time, people can pull it off.

    One thing I noticed wrong with the poem, or wrong to me. Was that you said 'heading down south to the summer'. While that is correct, they are heading TO summer, I find it a bit more simple to say 'for the summer'. Of course that's a phrase used quite often and you may want your own 'phrase' here.

    Good poem, Gem. You have exceptional talent.
    As I'm sure you're well aware of.

  • 11 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    The flow on your poems seem to be flawless always, I'm so jelous. The vocab was exellent. 6/5 :P xxx alex xxx

  • 11 years ago

    by Tammie

    I love nature poems, but I'm not any good at writing it. You, I must say, have a talent for them. Your description here is so well written, and the flow was well done, yet again. Well done on a great poem. :]


  • 11 years ago

    by Gamaliel munoz

    I love the feeling you get out of this one

  • 11 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    The whole feel of this piece is so relaxing and calm. Very serene....and QUIT SAYING MEH!!!lol! :) I mean seriously, you could recite the alphabet and you'd get 15 or 20 comments on it! Lol!!! You're work is incredible, Gem. You are a fantastic poet and I can't wait to read more! :)
    ~Midnight Sun