This is such an incredible piece...and true to your style. Your words always have the ability to cut through me Gem. It's amazing how talented you are. My fav lines were-
His hungry black eyes darting out of control
This is the result of selling your soul
-I like it so much because it paints an intense picture and at the same time allows you FEEL what the problem is...I'm not sure if that makes much sense, lol. Anyways, it's incredible as always girl! Oh! And incredible title, immediately captures your attention! 5/5 of course! :)
I liked this piece, as before, it was very well written. The wording was superb, as well as the rhymes and flow, blah, blah, you've heard it all before, lol. But the story and the words were what really made this piece great. I loved the first two lines of the last stanza, they were brillaintly written. I think my favorite stanza was the first one though.