Wax Lips

by DepthofPassion   Feb 12, 2008


I am not sure how I feel about this. I know it needs some improvements but I wrote it for someone and those who know me know that I do not normally do the " love thing" so I really think this poem/prose turned out poorly. Give me your honest opinion. Thanks and I appreciate it immensely.
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Your eyes glisten with sadness and my heart beats with confusion. I don't know what I want, but I know I want you. My smiles are becoming more sarcastic and your hugs are dripping with poison. I don't know what I want, but I know I want you. Your wax lips are trembling with sin and deception. I tell you I don't know what I want, but I know I want you. While my shameful tears are becoming harder to mask your intoxicating touch will send me to my seductive grave. Your eyes glisten with sadness and my heart beats with confusion. I don't know what I want, but baby I know I want you.

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  • 16 years ago

    by elena

    Your poem was very descriptive and i thoroughly enjoyed it. It had alot of imagery