Ana..You Lose

Omg I love this poem! absolutly love this poem =) You really caputred the feelings well. I personally can relate to this!

I love the emotion that I could feel through your words, the relief, the happiness knowing that you have beaten her!

The word choice you use was perfect and the flow throughout was flawless! The thing that most caught me was the imagery you created, through your words jumped the images of a young person overcoming this, and with each discription each word, yI as the reader could picture this!

You did an amazing job!

"So why don't you stop messing with my head
Wise up to the fact I'm no longer going to believe
Finally I'm starting to see your true colours
And I'm wondering how I was ever so naive"
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I chose the above stanza as I personally can relate, I hav only recently come to realize that what she was doin was not causing me the happiness that I wanted, and I have sat there and wondered how once I beleived every word she said! You capured this perfectly!

"Not going to fall for spiteful lies any more
Time to erase you from my head and mind
Wont let you constantly control me now
Refuse to spend my days so terribly confined"
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I love this stanza as it shows great courage, some might never understand how much courage it takes to stand up to "her".

"And every single time I place food in my mouth
Can't help but let a small smile start to appear
For it means that I'm taking back my life
Your twisted voice beginning to disappear"
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I chose this stanza as again it shows courage, that for so long you have faught battle after battle when taking a mouth full of food and then finally you can sit there and take each mouth full and smile knowing that its over! great job again hun!

"Always thought that you were trying to help me
Constantly chanting "Nothing tastes as good as thin"
But now finally realizing you only want to hurt me
Face it Ana...This time you're not going to win"
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Amazing way to end the poem! Brilliant! Great choice of words and great emotion desplayed in one stanza!

You did an amazing job with this poem hun! desurves so much more than a 5 so il give you my personal rating of 100/5 =)

Great job :)

~ This Mask I Hold Is Not Held Tight ~

I really loved this poem because you gave the disease a personality and played it out all the way the vocabulary was good and the images you created were well done I gave it a 5 hope to see more like this Plot121

Wow, another excellent write from a excellent poet. Keep up the amazing writes. The flow was good as well as the structure, however; I felt it could of been stronger if you had puncuation throughout.

Peace, Joe

This poem reminds me of the days when I attempted to free myself from someone with control issues Your style remains stedfast

*Claps loudly
IF there ever was a perfect poem this is it, the rhymes were amazing, the flow was flawless, the emotion again was deep and moving, I think i have to say i like this one the best so far 5/5 Again keep up the great work, You have amazing talent