The Move

by debbylyn   Mar 4, 2008


Loose the handle, turn once more
Lost in thought upon the door
Painted white, walls pristine
Covered over all that's been

Baby's jellied thumb was there
Crayola red sketched teddy bear
Window gleaming sparkling new
'Lil slugger tossed his baseball through

Mistletoe on doorway hung
Lover's kiss when both were young
Family photos framed with care
Smiles in rooms that now lie bare

Plush new carpet lining halls
Gone the paw prints staining all
Backyard tree sways, missing swing
Ghosts of children dance and sing

Laughter sounds from days gone by
Silent tears flood longing eyes
Gripping handle, turn once more
Echoes of the slamming door

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  • 16 years ago

    by silhouette fairy

    Great imagery (having an off day so i don't know if that is spelled right) well thought, great flow and rhyme
    over all great poem

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    It was very good. I have only two complaints and I wouldn't ask you to change them for the world. By and eyes isn't a perfect rhyme because only one ends with the sss sound and the line beginning with lil' slugger bothers me because when one sounds out the word lil' it actually is two syllables, there for the line is one syllable more than it should be. Other than that it was perfect. I will give you a five nevertheless.

  • 16 years ago

    by Barry

    Time is strange....sometimes we just feel we have all the time in the world...

    Yet the seconds somehow can be so precious

    before you know it......you are just left with memories

    beautiful.....memories

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Debbie,

    You have done such a great job on both the flow and the imagery!
    Bravo!

    hugs,
    5/5 Ingrid

  • 16 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Very well put. Really paints the picture of what a home is like, and how said it is to leave it behind.
    Charisma*

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