Perfection at its finest. [temp]

by ASPHYXIATED   Mar 5, 2008


Falling back to old conclusions,
Old habits on the bathroom floor,
Shaking, breaking for a solution,
When love and laughters become a chore.
Tripping over lost resolutions,
Hopes and dreams all fall apart,
Cornered by waves of confusion,
Sanity's long suffered a broken heart.

Treading upon new found footsteps,
His fingerprints on her frozen heart,
Destroying habits and pathetic concepts,
Catching her before she fell apart.
Smiling brightly when she sees him,
Innocent eyes filled with hope once more,
Countless memories caught on film,
To her depression he was the cure.

Tracing love hearts in the snow,
And commitments in the sand,
Public displays to let everyone know,
Observing life hand locked in hand.
Butterfly kisses while watching sunrise,
Tackle hugs when they see the sun set,
Kisses of affection as they say their goodbyes,
And memories they'll never forget.

True love;
Perfection at its finest.

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  • 16 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    I loved the poem. :]
    Great job, sweetheart.
    I loved the whole thing.
    Lovce you xxx
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Well, I've got to say, I really don't like love poems, but this one. Wow. It really captivated me. All the imagrey was just amazing, your word choice was superb. It's very hard to get me to like a love poem, amazing job.

    Treading upon new found footsteps,
    His fingerprints on her frozen heart,
    Destroying habits and pathetic concepts,
    Catching her before she fell apart.
    Smiling brightly when she sees him,
    Innocent eyes filled with hope once more,
    Countless memories caught on film,
    To her depression he was the cure.

    ^^ Awww, I love this whole entire stanza. It gives people who have been hurt [like me] hope that there are a few guys out there that won't hurt them, and who'll catch them if they fall.

    His fingerprints on her frozen heart,

    ^^ I seriously pictured a frozen heart. *shivers*

    The last stanza was a little cliche, but really it didn't take away from the beauty of the poem. Great job!

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

  • 16 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    Wow, the rhyme scheme was aweome and i really love the content of this poem. Flowed well, brilliantly written and unique at some part. really well worded one. How I adore these lines:

    Butterfly kisses while watching sunrise,
    Tackle hugs when they see the sun set,
    Kisses of affection as they say their goodbyes,
    And memories they'll never forget.

    Absolutely 5/5!!!

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