Muse-ic To My Ears

Well,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring.

^^I like how this started out, it makes me think you've found something that was semi-unexpected, which made me want to continue reading. It really drew me in...

Sympathy to your lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,
Muttering metaphors to twilight,
Tasting a hollow imagination.

^^"Caution dazzles within eyes," really jumped out at me, it's a very creative line. That and the idea of how expressive eyes can be is such an interesting one, to think that looks can express mere thoughts, is pretty cool. I also like the imagery you express here, especially in "Tasting a hollow imagination", the concept of it is extremely interesting as well as vivid.

Absorbing creativity to glitter,
Drifting tranced to beating door,
Inadequate to depart once again,
Oh contemptible translucent muse.

^^ Hmm a little critique: "Drifting tranced to beating door" sounds a bit off to me. (I could really be reading it wrong though. Keep that in mind for I often do so). Anyway, I think it would make more sense if you said 'trance' instead of 'tranced', because tranced seems to add past tense to this stanza when the way it's written doesn't imply past tense. Just a random thought. :)

Blaze attire to particles of dust,
Clip cypress crown to never vanish,
Chant inspiration to rushing ears,
Grounded mutilated upon my shoulder.

^^I love this stanza, it's my favorite. An image comes to mind that I can't quite describe, so I won't, but I feel a lot of depth in it.

Oh
how,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring
-Muse, you're not going anywhere.

^^ I like the ending and how you bring back thoughts from the beginning. It gives me a sense of completion, not just in the poem but in what could have been going through your mind as you were writing.

I also really admire the form and how you use capitalization and punctuation. (I know that's nerdy to say, but it stood out in a good way to me). Oh and the wordplay in the title is awesome! It's the main reason I clicked on the poem, which is overall brilliant. :)

Love love love this.

Alright, I'll complain right from the beginning I suppose. No, the only thing I dislike is the layout of the poem. I dont like choppy lines, I guess. I'm kind of a neat guy. Lol.

The entire poem in itself was a good message. You capture the attention from the beginning by somehow beginning to state a story and then leaving the reader to want much more by the end.

You vocabulary was superb in this, it was quite detailed and well put together. My favorite lines were "Sympathy to your lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,"

One thing I do hate those is a mix of too many descriptive words all together. It throws off the entire poem to me and it just seems like my brain is trying to visualize way too much out of the poem and it doesnt work out. There were only a few occurances of that in this piece of poetry for me, so you made it work.

I really enjoyed reading this. A good descriptive poem is needed here and there, I'd say. Very nicely done. (:

Well,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring

Awesome opening to a poem. Very interesting.

Sympathy to your lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,
Muttering metaphors to twilight,
Tasting a hollow imagination.

You use very nice vocab. And I love that in poetry. It makes the reader really think about the poem.

Absorbing creativity to glitter,
Drifting tranced to beating door,
Inadequate to depart once again,
Oh contemptible translucent muse.

Again, Its wonderful. I have nothing bad to say....

I don't think there's anything else bad I can say about the poem either.. I've read it over a few times, And there is not one thing I would change and alter.

Truely an amazing piece, Very good talent. Keep on writing!

Well,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring

Awesome opening to a poem. Very interesting.

Sympathy to your lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,
Muttering metaphors to twilight,
Tasting a hollow imagination.

You use very nice vocab. And I love that in poetry. It makes the reader really think about the poem.

Absorbing creativity to glitter,
Drifting tranced to beating door,
Inadequate to depart once again,
Oh contemptible translucent muse.

Again, Its wonderful. I have nothing bad to say....

I don't think there's anything else bad I can say about the poem either.. I've read it over a few times, And there is not one thing I would change and alter.

Truely an amazing piece, Very good talent. Keep on writing!