Final Destination

This is WONDERFUL!
Luu, your poems always hold a special rhyme, I never really get bored or feel like something is cliche out there.

A deathly cocktail so enticing
taste of forbidden fruit so sweet
wondering if the poet realized
he revived a heart that lost it's beat
^
I'm pretty sure this is all the readers' fave stanza :D lol..I totally loved it..amazingly written, and very well expressed..I couldn't agree more with your words.

Very well done babe.
You're amazing!
Write on~

I liked how it rhymed at the end of each stanza...I loved the depths of your pen..very captivating and always highlights some areas of learning in our lives..Good job Luu..

Another time, perhaps another life
their wings shall spread and soar
but until the whisper of the final breath
her heart belongs on the island shore

I truly loved this write Lu, How many times do we dream about how things could be....but not meant to be at all. It doesn't hurt to dream though.
All of your poems reach out and grab the heart, Sometimes I think Oh how nice of you to write about my life! LOL That takes a real talent to touch others in that way!

You had reall good rhymes, but to be honest, I only really like stanzas three and four - they had a nicer flow, and I enjoyed what was being said more.

Brad

^Within wavelets of blue a gaze befalls
upon ripples mesmerizing to the eye
lost in memories as thoughts wander
to times of foregone days gone by^

I like the repetition of this as the first and last stanza. Good flow, word choice and imagery throughout the piece. Nice job.