In Loving Memory (Miscarriage)

I really like this poem. It really helped me.

Yeah i understand where your coming from i just lost my baby who never actually got a chance to live life. i dont think i will ever get over it cause now i feel like the man i married was a mistake cause it feels like i only married him cause he got me pregnant.

ShortyLiz

I am really sorry to tell you this, but someone has stolen this poem hun. http://thebrokenheartsclub.deviantart.com/gallery/
check it out.

And every time I see a giggling baby
My entire being cries out in silent pain

that made me just break down and cry... hon, Im so sorry for your loss. I have one child of my own and another on the way and I worry constantly about this thought or if it will ever happen to me. So many women and girls it happens to, and sometimes by having a child, I feel ashamed to be put in that place (sometimes, when feeling happy), it makes me break down and cry because I knew that some mothers had their children just snatched away before born.

sorry for your loss. I will do my best to listen if you need someone to.

Michelle

First off, if this is true, I am extremely sorry for your loss. You've probably heard it a million times, but there is never really anything to say besides that. I can't imagine the emotion that's overwhelming you, and it saddens me that such things happen to those who actually want their child. I hope the pain subsides with time, and that something this harrowing will not overtake you completely with grief for too long a period of time.

As for the actual piece, the poet inside me is kicking to critique. But I must say, this piece was extermely amazing compared to others I've read by you. Because of the emotion, it's especially shattering.

Guess heaven needed one more angel
`This is an absolutely BEAUTiFUL choice of diction. It holds such strong heartbreak; a sweetest sadness. The wrenching grace in this "reasoning" of why the baby was lost ... it's just inspiring.

And I'm sorry for the things that I did
Can't help but feel it is all my fault
`I feel it would be read better as:
"And I'm sorry for the things I did,
I can't help but feel that it's all my fault."
It makes more sense? *shrugs.

And every time I see a giggling baby
My entire being cries out in silent pain
`You already used a different version of "silent" in the previous stanza, and it sort of takes away from the emphasis of the word. Maybe try a synonym? Either way, these lines are really gutwrenching. I never feel empathy while reading poetry, but Lord, you made me want to tear up.

There's just some wording that you should work on that dull the shining of this piece, but nothing can top the saddening beauty of the emotion that's so openly portrayed here.

Again, I am sorry if this is actually true.
..__MiNDYY