The Sunset {Contest}

I love how this seems like a conversation, that your writing a poem as well as telling a person how you really feel.

"Where else would I rather be,
when this is what I've dreamt of?
Sure, the sunset is breathtaking,
as it shines down on our love."

This is what made me think that this is a conversation. "Sure, the sunset is breathtaking" As most sunsets would be, this poem is speaking to its readers.

"Laying next to you on this hill,
staring at the beauty that we see.
It's perfection as we're together,
all alone; just you and me."

Your getting more descriptive here, I can clearly see two people laying down on a hill who love each other with all hearts. I can really relate to this.

"It's orange and yellow in colour,
the same colours of heat.
It's only been one short year,
since you and I were destined to meet."

Describing colors in poem I liked Its in a way like how a poet would describe the 5 senses, this is describing it in colors, to show feeling and emotion.

""Have you ever seen anything so pretty?",
is how I broke the silence between us two.
"Yes; everytime I look in your eyes,
I'll see something so pretty when I do.""

Ahhh...More conversations which I like the talking to the reader, telling the reader actually how you feel. Great poem over all.

Hmm, honestly not the best of your poems I've read. I know this poem was based on a picture, which I think made it quite a challenge to write so well done.

The first and second stanzas were excellent, with great imagery, starting off the poem with a rhetorical question to the reader and explaining how the poem involved you, and a lover.

I liked the idea of the third stanza, using the colours as imagery and giving the reader more information about your relationship with the other person in the poem. However, I thought the flow was lost a little, particularly in the second line. It also seemed a little basicly worded in comparison with the rest of the poem, perhaps slightly more description of the sunset would have improved this stanza? The repetition of 'Colour' slightly damaged the poem as well, so maybe replacing this word with a couple more could work better, e.g. Design?

I really loved the idea of the last stanza as well, however I felt it could be improved further again. Perhaps by removing the'Is how' and just leaving the second line to be
'I broke the silence...' would improve the flow a little more. Also, the last line didn't really make sense, the rhyming seemed too forced and false. By changing the last line, but keeping the meaning of it, it could make a bigger impact and the ending could be better.

Overall, I thought this was still a great poem, and even though it wasn't written to perfection, all the ideas in the poem were great and original. Good work.
4/5
Sole x

You are so very talented, in many fields.

this poem is absolutely beautiful, great start and finish.

the word choice was simply perfect,

keep up the good work.

This was very adorable. Watching the sunset, is such a beautiful site. This poem contained a lot of imagery in which really painted a beautiful picture in my mind. Wonderfully written, the flow was amazing as well as the rhyme. Great work, again.. and like always... 5/5

The imagery stands out because it surpasses the natural beauty of a sunset by extending it to a romantic realm

I am impressed
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>