Withering World We live In

Oh my goodness, this poem is amazing. I love it, and it is very deep. Emotion is fantastic and I think you have penned something amazing.

Amongst all this depressing shit
I'll regret being part of it
^^ Wow, I love that this is how you begin this piece. This way the tone is established at the very beginning and your voice is already shown.

Because I know how it feels to have no one to talk to
Even now, I'm familiar with the colors black and blue
^^ I too have felt this, it is nice to know that I'm not the only one as it sometimes seems.

I don't want you to go though the pain
Holding everything in and having your heart strain
^^The above portion is my favorite in the piece, though if you asked why I couldn't tell you.

Let me tell you I care for your life
And let me reach for your hand, and take away the knife
^^ Magnificent ending. I think this sums the piece up wonderfully.

5/5 great job, though I have to say that without punctuation, your flow was a bit of a challenge.

Wow, this poem really makes the reader think. Not think like oh what was he feeling, but think about the world around the and just how right you are. I think you have done a magnificent job penning this piece. Your emotion is so clear, your voice is strong yet somehow friendly, your tone was saddned while sprinkled with tiny bits of hope. I absolutely love this piece. It speaks to me and tells me something about you. I hope if you really feel this way things get or got better. Though I can relate in a way to this piece. Excellent, nay, Extraordinary job. This is for sure going on my list of favorite pieces and you are going on my list of favorite authors.

One of your best poems!!! :)

Wow, this is a really strong poem. i loved it. great work. Shanik

Meep, buddy...this is absolutly amazing! <3