Last Command

by Kevin   Jun 6, 2004


All good things
to their end do come
it is not law
or even natural
it’s just what we believe

as we are
in flesh and bones
we think eternity
we’ve never known

our bodies war
with creeping hands
makes us believe
in seeping sands

so as an end
before you dawns
remember that we are not pawns
and time
so much as you conceive it
means nothing to our souls
for they do not feel it

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  • 19 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    Good poem. If I have any criticism, it would be that your lack of punctuation sometimes makes the ideas in this poem difficult to discern. Punctuation in poems certainly isn't mandatory, but it can aid poems by not only providing a guide to reading the poem out loud, but also by making the sentences make more sense. Also, in the last stanza, should the word "dawns" be used? Wouldn't that verb be conjugated as "dawn" in the you form? I'm not too sure about that actually... oh well, good poem.

  • 19 years ago

    by Kevin

    This is just about endings..i wrote it initially as the last poem for my collection...but it turned into something deeper.

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