Digital Affair

by Faithless   Sep 21, 2008


It's a digital affair
we can only stop and stare
at the computer
in front of us

There is no need for us to travel
or take the bus
There is no need for us
to make a fuss
Cause all the decision made
can be discuss

We can chat all day
from dawn to dusk
talk about the future
and forget our past

What seems to be love
seems like a lust
We are in our own movie
being the actual cast

The movie goes on
without an end
a twist awaits
cause it all depends...

whether the two lovers
decides to stop the affair
or to be fair
to the person
at the other end

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  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "It's a digital affair
    we can only stop and stare
    at the computer
    in front of us"

    The first two lines are strong, but I feel like the last lines are weaker. Maybe try changing the last lines to:

    "at the small computer,
    sitting in front our faces".

    Just my opinion, I just feel like you need more detail/adjectives.

    "There is no need for us to travel
    or take the bus
    There is no need for us
    to make a fuss
    Cause all the decision made
    can be discuss"

    Fifth line: "decision" should be plural.
    Sixth line: "discuss" should have an "ed" added on to the end of it.

    "What seems to be love
    seems like a lust
    We are in our own movie
    being the actual cast"

    That's cool, I like those last two lines!

    "The movie goes on
    without an end
    a twist awaits
    cause it all depends..."

    Perfect ending, excellent rhyming. 4/5 from me. Again, like in another one of your poems, some places you rhyme others you don't. My advice would be to just rhyme in each stanza, it will read better. Take care..

    whether the two lovers
    decides to stop the affair
    or to be fair
    to the person
    at the other end

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