Life's Journey (Tanka)

I like this :) it gives me a sense of hpe and a lot of things lack that now. It's refreshing to read something that's not all doom and gloom. That's mostly all I can write lol. But this was simple but beautiful. Again I admroe you for trying something new and not being afraid to leave your comfort zone. I think you did an amazing job with this and I wouldn't change anything about. Flawless darling :) Nik

So beautifully penned... in few words you have captured the imagery so beautifully... making the analogy with the river... life goes one... till we reach the sea...

beautifully penned...

"Stream gushing forth
In the heartless summer breeze,
-A life, I was given-
To survive and not withered,
I must reach for the sea!"

short yet filled with life's perspective, you have managed to present the content flawlessly and the rhyme and rhythm is well orchestrated. Wonderful! Wonderful!

=5/5=

I loved it! The third line where you say that your life was given to you and how you put hyphens around it, made it very powerful to me. I really enjoyed reading it... amazing job*

"In the heartless summer breeze,"
- This line just gave me a warm feeling of happiness - it really sets the mood for the poem.

"I must reach for the sea!"
- A phenominal ending, I must say. (:

I, myself have never written a tanka but I may have to try it one day. Overall, your poem was amazing. The words blended so well together, and the imagery was quite beautiful. Nicely done.

5.5
Take care,
Stephanie.