Broken Inside
by a broken smile with a broken heart is a poets life Oct 2, 2008
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I know I can't make you love me |
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17 years ago
by Mister 47
If i want to put my emotions like you did , i would not be able to do that , as prefect as you expressed ,
soo yes, i will be stadning there till she break every piece of my heart!!
i am amized buy this poem even teh rhyming is not good , but i did not care that , since , it talked to me , very closly and describe my life too , as you see !!
you deserve a 5 from me blindly on this one!!
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17 years ago
by sezz
Oh sweetie, such a touching, heart felt poem, so much power in such a short piece, im so sorry you have been through this
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17 years ago
by Ash
Excellent work. A well written piece though so sad but a great depiction of a heart that is starving without love. 5/5 from me.
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17 years ago
by Marc Ortiz
The ending of this poem is really sad. You really love him don't you? Anyway, there are some words in this poem that are spelled wrong.
You bring me down every (timw) we talk
= Time
The smirk in (you) lips tell me how cruel you are
= I think you meant 'your'
I think to enhance this poem you should try to use some punctuations in it.
Anyway, I'm sorry to hear that he's treating you badly... No one deserves that.
I think you should change this line. (It's somewhat confusing)
= i'm obsessed with you accepting me
It was a nice read. Keep it up.
