Ravaged Heart

by HOLLY ARMER   Oct 15, 2008


Forces of immeasurable
conflict tattered in
translucent garb
create confusion
casting us into the
nothingness of a
lost friendship where
only distant vows echo
coldly against the beat
of my ravaged heart

*This was a club challenge rewrite. It's based off of the very first poem I ever wrote titled "The Invisible Force"
You can check that poem out if you want to see how it or I have evolved, lol.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Rihanna

    Excellent write...just amazging

    5/5 from me darl(:x

  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Excellent job on the rewrite!! Good word choice in this thought provoking piece!

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats on your win Holly!
    (((hugs)))
    Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Holly
    You did an awesome job on this rewrite challenge. Excellent imagery and word choices.
    Excellent!
    Take Care
    Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Lu

    Holly you have done an amazing job on the re-write my friend.
    I am so happy to see you back with us and ... writing again

    ~Hugs~
    Twin Lu

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