Magical Stardust Memories

^^^I don't mind at all, Michael.
Love you, man:) You are a gem.

Ingrid,

another sad love story, are you trying to tell us all something?

As we walked underneath the moonlight,
I collected stardust in my hands
Our world was filled with magic
Strolling on the warm summer sand
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vivid imagery here. I can see two lovers walking the moonlit beach, waves lapping the sands and it rhymic sound creating a hypnotic scene. I see you both smile at each other, enjoying the romance, wanting this night forever more. *dropping the word 'the' on the last line may sound better?..just an idea?*

We promised to always stay together
and felt so sure our love would last
Hearts pounding so hard in our chests
It all became a memory of the past
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This stanza highlights the promise of forever and also the turn is fate as it all became just a memory. *again dropping the word 'so' from the second and third line may sound better and on the last line changing 'a memory to memories, may sound better..again, just an idea?*

All that is left to me is a little jar of sand
Magical stardust memories of you and me,
walking along the shore that night
Unaware we were never meant to be
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So sad love in all its hopes and dreams reducing to memories contained in a jar.
*All that's left is a jar of sand,
stardust memories of you and me.
walking along the shore that night,
fate never meant for us to be....just a thought, please use all, some or none of my suggestions*

Well done Ingrid I hope you don't mind my input.

((hugs))

Michael

Awwwwwwwwwww...so sweeeeeeeeeeeeeet, i was really touched :(

I loooooooved this poem...perfectly written...just a perfect poem...

keep writting, ingrid, god bless you...

I really like this, its a great poem but really sad to(L) its got a great flow and a good title too. 5/5

It si uique in a way to mention stardust,

and sands, and promisses, soo romantic image can a person put in his mind, and how awfull the bitter will be when you know you are never meant to be,

a lot of thing sin this world are not meant to be but tha tdont mean we can not seek them for us !!1

if we can wish upon a star pasing through the skies,

and that wish can come true,

how about holding that star in your hand , adn wishing that same thing ?

increadibly good one