Overall an emotional and heartfelt write. The flow was almost flawless in my opinion, I felt the flow would be flawless with some more usage of punctuation. Although you had some within, it wasn't as much as I would've liked to see. Punctuation is very important in poetry since it lets the reader know when to pause or stop as well as adding to the overall flow. The structure was good and your choice of wording was excellent. I like your style of writting, keep up the good work.
You are very talented. Your Title just caught my eyes and the wording in your poem are just wonderful. What makes your poem unique and wonderful, is that everyone can relates to it. You blow me off my feet. I love it. 5/5, kel.
I just loved the title! It was so unique and caught my eye.
"Hearts begin to flutter and flip
like they are on some kind of high."
^Oh boy I know that feeling oh too well. You just lose control because that person gets your head spinning and heart skipping a beat filling like youre on some kinda drug.
"No other melody would have
sufficed the craving of perfection."
^I just loved how you worded this! It flowed so flawlessly off my tongue when I read it out loud and the meaning behind it was immense and beautiful. Perfect choice of words.
"Rules of things forbidden
no longer appear as a crime."
^Well said! I loved the atmosphere you created here with your words. Sometimes people give into lust but feel guilt as if they've committed a crime but the power unleashed by temptation is just too much too control and you have to feed that desire.
Loved the ending! What a innocent play on words to foreshadow that the kiss was not the endâ€¦it leaves me the reader wanting more and asking what happens after! Your use of imagery here was flawless in painting an image of two souls wanting to give in to their desires and feel the sensation of love and lust. Your rhyme was great here and your choice of words were simple yet filled with meaning. A beautiful poetic write you have penned here that leaves the reader wanting more!
"Just one instigating look,
a lock of passionate eyes."
`Perfectly done! Instigating! Beautiful way to start a poem.. the first thing you think of between two people is how their eyes meet and they instantly become locked.
"Desire and temptation
instantly appear and arise."
`Youre right. Then the desired and temptation arise, and its impossible to resist. :]
"Accidental spark filled touch,
as you purposely brush by."
`Oooh. I love it! I dont know why I loved this so much.. I thought there was something original behind using the words accidental and purposely the way you did.. not sure what it is loll. I just adored it. I thought it was unique in a way.
"An alluring cracked smile,
only flashed on the face.
Enough to get anyone's
heart to start to race."
`Beautifully done. Alluring was the most gorgeous word you could have used. :]
"A drawing and inviting giggle
caresses the silence in every direction."
`Caresses.. oh goodness. :] I love this! You really are doing a great job using your title.. Engaging Body Language.. the eyes meeting, then the brush up against eachother, and the alluring smile, .. Its all coming together perfectly! Then now you have the inviting giggle.. makes me wander whats next.
appear on a blushed cheek.
Maybe just one kiss
can quietly be sneaked."
`Awww. So cuute.
"Fierce but seductive wink,
flickers at the right time."
`Youre doing amazing! The flow is flawless, the words are outstanding and everything is just coming together extremely well. Seductive wink.. Ahh, your adjectives are mindblowing!
"Impulse takes control,
no longer can either resist."
`Like I said before.. the desire and temptation is to much to resist.
lips meet and sparks send."
`:] yupp yupp.
Loved this piece!
Engaging Body Language -~Perfectly fitting title!-~