Rubik's Cube

A beautiful masterpiece, the emotions were excellent, very unique poem, that was very deep and meaningful. 5/5 from me, this was a pleasure to read! Take care, keep writing, always and forever...

This poem is full of 'I'. Not good. Anyways... it doesn't matter in this site!

I'll be back to this piece as soon as I have more free time to leave a thoughtful comment, but I just wanted to say how much I like it. Intelligent, refreshing and such a beautiful write, Mel. Excellently done.

I'm inflamed by the neurotic
obsession which have
confined my heart.

^^ I love the beginning. BUT, 'which have'? Shouldn't that be 'which has'? OR 'neurotic
obsessions'?
I personally think that you should just put an s on the end of obession - have sounds better than has would sound in these particular lines.

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This poem is defintely written amazingly. I don't know if it's thought - out or just written quickly, but either way it seems thought -out and yet at the same time like it just came out smooth and solidly. I absolutely loved how you pieced it together and the word choice that you used; 'my charity', 'I'm no believer in beating in unison and yet I let
my heart beat away.' , ' i was never a believer in complexity, although i do believe in your heart.' - I loved all 3 of those parts. I thought that they brought the poem together. I liked how you kind of said, in ways, that you changed for your Rubik's Cube and did/believed things you normally wouldn't do or believe.