Love is never painless

by M I L L Y   Jan 28, 2009


After all we had together
now is thrown away in the air.
The love i feel for you is still strong
and i know you still care.

Its hard to give up on you
when it's been more than a year.
My heart still can't believe you're gone,
I'm lost in tears.

Someone Told me before
that love is never painless.
but i was hoping my heart
would remain stainless.

Instead i got into the worse situation ever.
would i love someone again?
my answer is never.
The love I'm willing to share and give you is real.
Just say you'll stay babe, and we have a deal.

Don't keep someone you love away
And remember i love you forever not just for today.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Conrad

    I enjoyed it, good job.

  • 15 years ago

    by Sapphire

    Sorry about the first part my computer copied wrong

  • 15 years ago

    by Sapphire

    After all we had together now is thrown away in the air.
    The love i feel for you is still strong and i know you still care.
    Is hard to give up on you when it's been more than a year.
    "My heart still can't believe you're gone, I'm lost in tears."

    -Good start, I like it basic, it shows automatically what this poem will be about.

    "Someone Told me before that love is never painless.
    but i was hoping my heart would remain stainless."

    -Rhyming here is pretty basic, but the fact that it is basic, just adds to the overall effect

    "Instead i got into the worse situation ever.
    would i love someone again? my answer is never."

    -Worst situation? I can tell what you are talking about but this poem would have been more emphasized if you would have added what the situation was.

    "The love I'm willing to share and give you is real.
    Just say you'll stay babe, and we have a deal."

    -I really like these 2 lines, it's short and simple, but it's to the point.

    "Don't keep someone you love away
    And remember i love you forever not just for today. "

    -This was a good way to wrap up the poem, it ties the whole poem together.

    Overall, this poem was good. The structure itself might've been better, but the rhyming should stay the way it is. The flow itself wasn't to neat, but you could really tell what you were talking about. Great Emotion.
    4/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Annaam

    Btw, m giving it a 5/5 sO that the Overall rating is what the pOem shOuld have!

    :).

  • 15 years ago

    by Annaam

    Hmm... The rhyming is goOd and yOu've expressed yOurself well. I, hOwever, do agree with cOvered in darkness abOut the structure. ImprOve it so that it has paragraphs and will attract the reader. Also,

    ``Is hard to give up on you when it's been more than a year.
    --> I think it should be 'IT'S hard....' here.

    Still, goOd wOrk and I like it! :)