My Secret Valentine

I really like this poem :) And you style of writing ;) keep up the good work!

Another great piece. The metaphors were beautiful and the imagery was astounding! The flow was great and the emotions were apparent. I can relate to this piece completely. The beginning was very eye catching and I was hooked throughout the whole piece. Overall, amazing. 5/5

Amazing i loved it. and the words r beautiful i really injoyed it.

great job keep up the amazing work:)

These flowing tarcets eloquently deliver passionate imagery
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"Witnessing the sea of a million crystals
Diamond canvas in the sky that sparkles
Winds playing symphony for the singing angels"

^^What a truly beautiful opening..the imagery within these lines is incredible, so detailed and vivid that I can't help but be pulled into the piece and can't wait to continue on.

"The ocean breeze gently brushed her face
As she looked onto the wide open space
Looking for a sign of her lover's trace"

^^I don't think you need "the" in the first line, it works just as well, if not better, without.

"Midnight beach decorated with rose petals
A runway illuminated with ivory candles
Paving a trail that leads to a castle"

^^Favourite part so far, the imagery in these three lines is incredible, it's almost like I can -see- everything that you're describing.

"Curiosity leads her to walk down the aisle
Heart filled with anticipation for a lovely smile
Hoping the steps that she took will be worthwhile

A box wrapped gift sits gently in the middle
Tempted to unravel it like the forbidden apple
Craving to find the answer to a mystical riddle"

^^I really enjoyed these stanzas, as the reader I'm wondering what's in the box, and can't wait to find out, I found it added a touch of mystery to the poem and left me intriqued.

"Unveiling the gift only to find it's empty
Disappointment aches the heart, crying softly
Her soul longs to be in a state of tranquility"

^^Ooohh this is so sad, I didn't expect this to happen and it leaves me feeling somewhat sad, and wishing that the box wasn't empty.

"Suddenly descended from the heavenly cloud divine
A Prince landed his magic carpet onto the shoreline
Saying "My heart is my gift to you, my secret valentine "

^^What a beautiful, beautiful closing!! To go from mystery to melancholy to such happiness within the last three stanzas sure was a twist and definietly jerks the reader's emotions about, which made for a powerful affect on the overall piece.

I love this.