Round 'n Round

by BlueEyedMystery   Apr 7, 2009


Searching for nothing,
it's just something to do,
to take my mind off
[him]
and words that weren't true.

Pass the vodka,
around once again,
because anything else,
just makes my head spin.

Round 'n round,
the memories float,
and cigarette swirls,
make me want to choke.

Cry and cough.
Scream those lines.
Special? Ha.
You were never mine.

Or maybe you were,
and I pushed away,
the best thing
[ever]
to come my way.

My words don't make sense,
but they never really do.
I love you always
[never forget]
You will always be my tattoo.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Pass the vodka,
    around once again,
    because anything else,
    just makes my head spin.

    *I've noticed that in a lot of your poems you talk about alcohol or something close to it. I just thought that was interesting. Anywho I loved the title of this. I think it fit the poem well and was something orignal. I didn't like your ending much, because I've heard something similar in a song. That was kinda disappointing because your poems are always so refreshing and filled with new ideas. But I do like how hard hitting your words are. That's one thing you're great with, diction. Always exciting and well done. Another good poem deary. Your talents amaze me :) Nik*

  • 14 years ago

    by silvertung69

    This is a grate write.I love the way you blamed him and called him a lier and then took the blame on yourself, I love the honesty.5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by ChallengexEverything

    Excellent flow andd rhyme. the choice of words were simple but i could fell the emotion you tried to put in it.

    verrrrryyyy nice work hunn.
    i loved it.

    5/5
    :]

  • 15 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    I don't think the ending is as powerful as it could be . The second last stanza is actually better than the last . The flow was good for the most part , and the rhymes fit decently . I don't have any other suggestions .. I think this is really easy to relate to and really well done . 5<5

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