Redemption Again
by Jad May 18, 2009
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I walk down the road again |
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14 years ago
"It makes no since to me"
`sense
"To find myself
Forgotten, all alone
Like a book on a shelf"
`Good simile here, you feel so alone like a book on a shelf.
"My heart wants redemption
For my past wrong and mistakes"
`Well done with this - however, I dont think that you worded your second line properly. Maybe you should say "from my past and mistakes" or if you wanted to emphasize your past was 'wrong' - perhaps, you may the wrong choices or whatever you meant by that, you could use a different word for wrong and blend it in your line somehow.
Good job with this, simply written. The want for redemption.
5/5.
Temps.
