No Sunshine

Well done!!! Beautifully written!

"but instead, darkness has tilted her head
a tick too soon
and I'm equivocally indifferent
to my own intuition "

Outstanding ending...so honest and incredibly sad. Keep it up, Holly

Congratulations on another excellent poem Melissa

"Like all the men
I've ever adored,
I knew you'd eventually dim
just like a waning moon"

This stanza really caught my eye and you expressed yourself well here. I love the simile, very original in my opinion.

"nevertheless I assumed
with selfish certitude,
your willingness
would linger about these stuffy lines,
like a distant star
ready to shine its mystic twinkle
on silly me"

Your style is easy to read and flows so smoothly. I enjoyed each line here, very well-written. Your wording is not at all cliche but this stanza was creative and unique.

"but instead, darkness has tilted her head
a tick too soon
and I'm equivocally indifferent
to my own intuition"

Wonderful ending, this was a stunning read! You have tons of talent, so never stop writing! A deep and powerful masterpiece, congrats on the win, you really deserved it!

Take care and God Bless You!

~MaryAnne

I [k]new you'd eventually dim

"just like a waning moon"
`I loved your simile here, very well said.

"would linger about these stuffy lines"
`Linger seems to be a word that is very overused but this line.. woow.. not at all does it seem cliche, what a original line this was..

"on silly me"
`Did you mean to say oh instead of on?

"but instead, darkness has tilted her head"
`Maybe use its instead of hear?

"and I'm equivocally indifferent
to my own intuition"
`I loved your ending.. really well done.. powerful. :)

Great work!
5/5. Temps

Please don`t think all of us men are this way, you just have to keep searching, I am sure a woman of your talents can certainly attract the right kind of men, Don`t stop trying. Timothy r