Moving On

This was a really cute poem in my opinion, and perhaps that isn't what you'd want to hear. Though I think you need more of a pattern in this piece, because as I read it it seemed more like a monologue. But the flow you added in near the beginning, gave the monologue like poem a nice touch and more easily read near the beginning. Once it reached the 7th stanza:

"As realization hit you,
You know, once and for all now."

Your poem's flow just disappeared, and there was no scheme in it to begin with. I liked the idea of free verse in the beginning, but it needs more. Not so much as short chopped up thoughts to make it more like a poem. I liked the idea of this poem also, and I loved the expression in it as well. Especially the last two lines, it ended your poem beautifully.

I think that you should either follow a pattern with the number of lines in your stanzas if your going to allternate or keep them all the same count. Because it is throwing the reader off. Also this poem is very cliche. What about this topic is unique to you? I think with some syllabols it would do wonders for this poem.
3/5

You did a very nice job writing this, i loved the concept of it and the fact that it shows your willing to move on! Awesome job!