Miserable

"They all treat me the same, it hurts to feel this way,
Always the last option,what else can I say?"
That is my favorite line.
Its amazing. it really is. In fact its sad because apparently this is how i made my boyfriend feel putting him after friends and everything.. i made him suffer. this is a great poem.
-Tania

Touches deeply to someone who's pondered the same things , really well written . Rhymes are good other than
Can't take much more of this miserable life,
Just another toy in her evil little mind,
which just doesn't really even half rhyme ..

Amazing! I loved the darkness of it all. So much emotion put into those words.

My favorite lines were:
Thoughts of suicide, thoughts of death,
What will it be like to take my last breath,
Overwhelming stress and too much to do,
Nothing to gain and everything to lose,

Just once again wow, its so true those lines fill my heart beating again stopping to start.
hmm inspiring!!

6/5

Great poem.!.

Just what I needed. your amazing. I love it.

"Thoughts of suicide, thoughts of death,
What will it be like to take my last breath,"

^RIght off at the beginning, your poem started off good. A strong start, right to the point no questions asked. You start it off with a question in the second line which draws the reader in. Your asking, unsure and the way you did so was more effective than just saying you were going to take your last breath.

"Overwhelming stress and too much to do,
Nothing to gain and everything to lose,"

I really like the second line here. Everything to lose. It's a true concept, and overused line though it flows perfectly with the line previous to it. Not forced, it flows to put it simply.

"Can't take much more of this miserable life,
Just another toy in her evil little mind,"

^Here your poems flow was still okay, but I don't like how the rhymes suddenly disappeared, and that took a bit away from your poem.

"They all treat me the same, it hurts to feel this way,
Always the last option,what else can I say?"

^These lines leave millions of questions asked. You leave a vagueness that allows many to connect, and then to wonder what _you_ mean by this.

"Just wanna close my eyes and never wake up,
Atleast in my dreams, I don't stress as much,"

^The second line here seems to have strayed away from the original topic a bit, but it still rhymes and flows fairly well. Though I love the first line, it has a big Robert Frost feel to it, and makes me think of this poem immediately. You took this idea, and transformed it making it "Similar but different."

"Everytime you do this to me it gets more critical,
Thoughts of suicide, do you think im miserable? "

^Ending poems with a question is always good, and how you ended with the title was also very effective.

Very Well Done. I also loved how simple you allowed your poem title to be, and focused (mainly) around one theme throughout. 5/5 Favourited.