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"One deep breath - a soft smile,
Her skin is so soft to touch,
I search for words - worthwhile,
Her beauty is always too much,"

I love what you did with the dashes, that was really unique. This was a beautiful opening that brought alive the love you have for her. The flow was flawless and the rhyme was perfect too.

"It will take a miracle to find,
Words that can voice my heart,
I feel I'm falling far behind,
Or am I too scared to start?"

I love how you said "voice my heart" I really haven't heard that one before. Well-expressed thoughts and feelings, I like how you ended this stanza with a question.

"Unknowing she stays right here,
Forever close - I can't complain,
But if she knew I was sincere,
I'm scared - I would go insane,"

In the first line, I think it would sound better if "Unknowing" is "Unknowingly". That's just my opinion though. I also do not really like the repeat of "scared" maybe just have synonym?

"Someday I will find the way,
To have her here in my arms,
But until then I can only pray,
And rely on my silly charms..."

I love how you still stay positive, saying you will prayer, and that's all you can do. Great descriptions here, and again the rhyming and flow is right on target.

"I will always be right here..."

Although this was just one line, it stood alone and it held much meaning and power, especially as being the end of this piece.

Great job, just a few things that can be fixed but otherwise this was a enjoybable read.

Keep writing, God bless you!

~MaryAnne