Told too much

Nice. you did an excellent job describing this feeling you have. even though i may not be able to relate, because you described it so well, i can sympathize and i know exactly how you feel. nicely done
~Ben

Great poem. it had really good flow and the rhyme was kept all the way through it was great. i can relate i think alot of people can i mean there are always those people you think you can trust or you cant help opening up to. still it was really good

Amazing poem i can totally relate and i am almost positive a lot of others can as well, the poem is also very expressive which i like, and the rhyming is spot on 5/5 for this it was a great read!!

The title however is original it seemed kind of dull to me, it didnt draw me to this.

Now looking at the first verse, it seems to have the childish limerick beat to it, which when used correctly can have a rather sadistic twist that slaps readers in the face, it would seem like your reading childrens poetry until something just gets gruesome or unexspected. Just basic ryhming, nothing inparticularly special or original, rather good beat and flow. Like above normal.

Here it is already slapping me in the face in the second verse with a sudden turn from having someone around you 24/7 to a bad memory or your bad history.The part ryhme between past and harrased i have never seen before, just a little thing that caught my attention.

Back to the happier childish theme, which is alright but you lost the rythm that you had kept going perfectly through verse 1 and 2, just simply add some syllables to the last two lines of this and it would be just as good as the two before it.

Fear is a great climax for a poem, if verse 4 is the climax, and the ryhming was again basic, but then again most of mine is, so theres nothing wrong with it. except the last line is just BARELY out of beat, but its noticable.

verse 5 = deadwood, not needed in verse 4 you said bright light which could be a metaphor for realizing the truth about something which could of been what you were aiming for but if it wasnt then good job regardless, but in my opinion just remove verse 5 and then 4 and 6 would go great together and end the poem with a pang and you incorporated the title perfectly, It was going to be a 3 but just solely the end makes it worth a 4 to me. Again the childish limerick tone was quite original.

When I talk to you
I don't feel so alone.
^ these too lines need one or two syllables added , because they're much shorter than the rest and throw off the flow a little bit .

Your poem held alot of emotion, and I think you did a really good job . I think a lot of people can relate too because everyone is scared of sharing their secrets . 5/5