10:58 (Drowning)

Very emotional poem, great job. The only line that knocked me out of rhythm "Bring darkness over my sunshine." Perhaps you can word that differently.

I think everyone feels depressed and lonely from time to time, that feeling you have when the world seems out of reach. All it takes is a little hope and soon somebody comes along and makes you feel like your on top of the world. Excellent job I really enjoy the way you express your feelings in love.... lets the reader into your heart 5/5

Not only can I relate to this poem I love the way it is put together. It reflects your skill as a poet plus deep emotion

A so very depressing poem and in life unfortunately we have downs with our ups but usually it becomes a balance and hopefully you with have an up soon. Nicely written poem but there are a few on this site that are excellent because they are stronger on this subject. Good 4/5 Ray S

Oh, I really like this. The flow was nice, although I think it could a little better word choice. you know something to spice up the wording a little. Still not bad, but this is a piece most everyone can relate to.. If your dealing with this, I hope things get better