In Retrospect

by Melpomene   Jan 26, 2010


I believe we fear eternity
as we are too unstable in heart
immortality is essence if you
allow yourself to love.
Yet sometimes we are able
to whisper goodbye;
as he did --
placing a star within my palm.
So I carved my life line deeper,
and my heart line shorter
roaming the astral plane
calling for an angel.

I believe each soul has one last dance,
a final breath -- concluding life.
And we search every path for another heart
in order to feel complete.

The past haunts the present,
and the present effects the future,
his eyes became a distant light
guiding me to hell..
So I left the astral plane
sadistic for my pain..
hoping to find
his love once again.

I traveled in circles..

In past he told me
to love that star more then he.

*Thanks Jenn for the title.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Mimed Lovette

    I loved this Mel, it speaks of words no truer than a heart does. And in this poem, you certainly did your feelings justice by writing them out in ink.

    I believe each soul has one last dance,
    a final breath -- concluding life.
    ^ ^ ^
    This has got to be my favourite stanza, and how true...

    I loved how you used beautiful imagery by commenting on palm reading, that is, if what you meant by life line and heart line are similar to what I perceived them to be.

    Love love! this poem, looking forward to more from you!! XD

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I thought you had a nice word choice. The poem is both beautiful and sad. Well written in your unique style.

    ^The past haunts the present,
    and the present effects the future,
    his eyes became a distant light
    guiding me to hell..
    So I left the astral plane
    sadistic for my pain..
    hoping to find
    his love once again.^

    These words were heartfelt and insightful.....I am sure many can relate to this piece. Good structure and flow. Excellent job!

  • 14 years ago

    by Stephanie Michelle

    I.. Can't even find the words to describe how this left me feeling.
    Amazing write, that's for sure. Your wording and the way each line flows into the next.. astonishes me.

    5/5 - Beautiful job.

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