Remember Me

by Sunshine   Nov 8, 2010


Britts' contest
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Remember me

When love droops from heaven down to earth
aching your heart with further feelings to possess
by you flipping above a wavering destination
losing your self among the entire creation

As you sink in the depth of your dreams
where our memories within darkness beam
Surrounding your globe with hopeless hues
where journeys begin yet never reach you

when you glimpse sadness in innocent eyes
and hear a laughter where bitterness lies..
In the fresh air of your breathless nights
recalling my farewell during lonely twilight

when your endless road never comes to an end
and the gates of happiness won't let you tend
remember me, though it will always be late
for your remembrance shall never beat;

The sarcasm of fate

By: Rania Moallem

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  • 13 years ago

    by Natalie

    * simply wonderful *

  • 13 years ago

    by AngelDust

    Very straight forward and to the point. Your wording was good and it was what seemed to me, a rare subject that people write about. It was nice to see something different around this joint. It was a very smooth read. Good write. Well done.

    Danika
    --xx--

  • 13 years ago

    by Clown

    Hallow, I think this is the best word I can use to describe this poem. Lacking in some distinct manner. Though the suggestion of emotion is strongly present, I get the feeling that you have become very numb and very hallow. Saddness and pain empty the soul. I do relate to that particular feeling. This poem is beautiful, though lacking of true emotion, though your emotion is not fake, but more forced, like you want to feel sad for something you know you should feel sad for, though deep down you feel nothing at all. I may be overstepping the simplier truths, but this is my honest opinion. 5/5 without a second guess, I hope you find hope again.

  • 13 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    I am again touched by your natural and innocent depth,
    and your inner depth perception..
    and I Will Remember You.

  • 13 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    I am again touched by your natural and innocent depth,
    and your inner depth perception..

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