Speechless Ocean

I love it now with the revisions you've added.

Five :)

The title really caught my eye because I was left asking, "how can a ocean be speechless?" I wanted answer to me question :)

"Sometimes you reshape
me to a thirsty desert"
^It would sound better if it said "into a thirsty desert" the way you have it now sounds awkward. I love the imagery though.

"sometimes again,"
^This doesn't sound right, the grammars off. I get what youre trying to convey but the syntax isn't working. Try tweaking it around to give it a better flow.

"how can you turn me
so speechless?
^Can you really 'turn' something speechless? I understand the message but it doesn't sound right.

Overall I loved the metaphor behind your thoughts and I liked how the lines were short but there were some places it didn't flow right for me and I left my suggestions. Nice effort!

Why not change to something like: "the ink in my pen dries up."

^^^^
well since you got the concept, then no need lol :P

thanks :)

I really like what you are saying here.
You are definitely the queen of metaphors. :)

Having said that, I agree with the last commenter about "my pen's tongue gets swallowed" being kind of awkward. The reader needs to be able to picture the metaphor for it to be useful. Why not change to something like: "the ink in my pen dries up."

Anyway, nice write overall. :)

The idea is okay here, nothing spectacular, it's simple which I like I guess. You have such a short thought here, I almost think you could add so much more between the lines you have to add more depth to the poem. The only line that didn't really work for me was -

'my pen's tongue gets swallowed;'
^It's a nice metaphor & all but not really sure about 'tongue' and 'swallowed' they go hand in hand in a way but how can a tongue get swallowed? Like in a literal sense, not metaphorical. It doesn't create the image you want I don't think. I could very well be wrong, but it seemed off to me. I just think you need a different word for 'swallowed' and it'd work better.

A great thought you have here though and I liked the question at the end of the poem. You can never go wrong with one. ;)!