Self-Indulged

La7za Nana.. la7za.
what?
I swear at the first read, ma fhimit kteer... :p
but.. mm.. let's see.

"I'm immersed by my own flow,
steeped within the golden view
that fails to recruit the harmony
outside my window bars

glowing with the sun,
flowing with the wind
soaring with the flocks"

^ I thought of you, being haughty, seeing yourself above, like a sun, soaring... But something with the 'failing to recruit the harmony' made me doubt that it's a poem describing how awesome you are ;)

Then the tension builds up after this part. I can instantly feel the sadness and frustration poured.

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burning with the sun
fleeing with the wind
seeking for the flocks
...or their freedom?
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^ OMG I'm so in love, I found this Brilliant, Akuna Matata, Timon wa Bomba :p looolll..

Anyway, I've noticed the comparison you're trying to show between the second stanza and this one. You're not glowing, you're burning. You're not flowing, you're fleeing. You're not soaring, you're seeking freedom. The play on the thoughts hit home for me. From the outside, you appear someone else, from the inside, you are the real you. Oh, and you didn't just give the verb and its opposite, you alliterated that! Extra credit on this thing ;)

"Lonely, complicated,
I am
self-indulged but not alone,
for HE..says"

^ Now that's a great summing up to the idea of being 'self-indulged', and the aid of HE... mmm,, I think it's weird to me, but of course it's a beautiful thing to support the idea.

---Can you shoot me a PM about what you meant by:

"it is captivating beyond what you think"

^ I'm very curious to know your point about that. I think it's really important.

>>>Definitely an amazing poem, with so much emotions to grasp. CLAP CLAP. You're awesome, ma lady.

I'm immersed by my own flow,
steeped within the golden view
that fails to recruit the harmony
outside my window bars

^I feel you are saying you are happy with who you are but your surroundings are less than adequate and you search for something more than what you can see, I love the use of imagery here.

glowing with the sun,
flowing with the wind
soaring with the flocks

^You really told this part, and I felt warm, cold and then free all in these lines, awesome

such a mix of silence
and a ginger sky that
can never comprehend
nor reach the sad bustle
inside of me...

^Emotion was simple yet well portrayeed, the mix of silence and the sunrisen sky being the colour ginger instead of the normal orange or red we say it is

burning with the sun
fleeing with the wind
seeking for the flocks
...or their freedom?

^Loved the take on the similar stanza, adding to the flow and imagery

Lonely, complicated,
I am
self-indulged but not alone,
for HE..says

"it is captivating beyond what you think"

^WOW, what an ending, the feelings were strong, and the ending is thought provoking, because I was captivated by this but maybe for a reason not intended, I felt the message was that we are who we are and we are sometimes shaped by our surroundings but we must stay true to who we are for that reason.

Loved it

Love
Tara
xxxx

I love the free flow and depth of this thought provoking poem