Fate

Mori chan, is this based on areal incident?? :O
If it is I'm so sorry about it dear...oh things do get better with time.And I'm so glad you are alright now and are better and doing well.Well, I thank heavens nothing happened to you cause god forbid it did, I wouldn't be able to meet a friend as adorable as you. :)

Now to the poem :

Two thin lines are upon my wrists,
each giving away the most beautiful red wine.
To this very day I can't say that I regret any one of those gorgeous cuts;

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truthfully speaking i love these lines...they are just so beautifully written.Couldn't have been described better. But, but, but...if this is not on real incident i will love it more.I wouldn't want to scars on your hands...I can't see my friends hurt.

How this was supposed to be my last day,
but I couldn't leave cause of those damned loose ends all because of how undone they were!
All for love I'm forever bound to stay here till this misery consumes all.

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And I'm so glad it wasn't your last day.Thank goodness you had some loose ends and people whom you loved for whom you stayed or else I would never be able to meet you.Thank god.

Never regretting what I have done-
I walk towards the very light that will take me away from this hell of life-

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It is actually good to live a non-regrettable life.If you do not live a life of regrets mori chan I'm glad you don't.But again, regrets are good as long as we learn from them instead of live in them. :)
I agree this world is hell and living here is sometimes torture and that light sometimes might look appealing but the stronger one stays and fights here in this evil world trying to eradicate the evil.And i know you are strong. :)

I'm sorry that I have been a coward
to walk away from the people that has stood there through thick and thin all for me.
But in the end it's the decision that was written in blood the day I was born
for my mortality was forever destined to be cut short

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I think you were writing 'people that HAVE stood there'.
And I'm going to be truthful again, I didn't understand the last two lines.But then that is just me and my poor sense in understanding poems. :P

I like the write and hope you keep writing such wonderful poems but just not from actual experiences but fictional.

:)

So meaningful, 100/100

I like the way how its written also a bit sad though.
Hope you dont really feel that way! 5/5

xx

Two thin lines upon my wrists
Each giving way to the most beautiful red wine
Upon to this day I can't say that I regret any one of those gorgeous cuts
("upon to" doesn't make literal sense)

How this was supposed to be my last day
But I couldn't leave cause of those darned loose ends!
(darned loose ends doesnt make any sense, i get what you were going for but maybe take that out of edit to a nicer line)

All for love I'm forever bound to stay till this misery consumes all
(misery consumes all is one of my old lines, also this one doesn't make sense either, id write this line as :for all the love, forever bound, to stay until misery consumes it all, ok not that but something along those lines)

Leaving one family to join another
Giving up power and position just for a new start
Never regretting what I have done I walk towards the very light that will take me away from this hell of life
(this one was a little full of angst for my taste, your lack of punctuation takes away from the sense of this stanza, can easily be fixed though,)

I'm sorry that I have been a coward
To walk away from the people that has stood there through thick and thin
All for me
But in the end it's the decision that was written in blood the day I was born
For in the end it was just fate!

(again i think punctuation was your downfall, i think you tried to cleverly put something into the last line that wasn't coherent with the rest of the poem, if i did have the correct imagry than this is about mortality and how your a slave to death from the moment you were born, and it was destined that you go through the lot,????)

overall i liked this one, i just really wish you'd punctuate better, it would bring out the underlying beauty of your poetry, but these are all lessons learned with experience and time, your getting better!!!)

A tragic poem, I just hope you don't really mean what you have written, because life at the end of the day is beautiful, no matter what ordeals we may go through in our short lives on this earth.
I liked this dark poem, so full of 'reality', look forward to seeing more from you so you best hang around!! You always have friends here.