Mystic Sheer

by Meme   May 3, 2012


I hope you don't mind
me wearing a sheer of
mysteriousness over my
face. I'm not hiding who
I am, just veiling a pure
weakness in every smile.

A forbidden moment had
escaped to push my heart
beyond its reach. So excuse
the random odes I ramble
every time you take a new
step towards me.

Slowly,
unveil the minutes I stood
in your presence so silently.
Understand my vulnerability
when I dare to look up at you,
it's the first time I get to see
the true colors of your eyes.

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© Copyright 2012 by: gIrL
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  • 11 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Hey, hey! What's happening to you!? Are you taking some kind of pills for creativity or something? Whatever! I want some of them, share lady! I LOVED this write from you, so captivating! I have no idea who you were addressing but to me? I felt you were talking to someone who hurt you too much that even if you still love them, you can't forgive! You just can't. Or someone who lied to you? Because you said something about true colors in the ending, ahhh or perhaps you meant that they changed? Ughh, I don't knooow. I just loved some images so much that I couldn't help but comment, well job, Miss Meme! ;P

    I hope you don't mind
    me wearing a sheer of
    mysteriousness over my
    face. I'm not hiding who
    I am, just veiling a pure
    weakness in every smile.
    ^
    mystery would work better than ...myster..ious...ness. I don't know, it felt long and tiresome haha, maybe I'm just a lazy bee, but again mystery would work better. Just my opinion! OMG the pure weakness in every smile, for sure I'm going to nominate this the next week, or if I have stillvotes (which is impossible) I'll nominate it this week, so easily! Because!? because that was perfection!

    So excuse
    the random odes I ramble
    every time you take a new
    step towards me.
    ^
    The best part I've read today, hey I've read about 100 pieces this morning! ;P
    Love your calm tone, so much sweet and soft!

    'Understand my vulnerability'
    ^

    AHHHHH!
    wonderful
    imaginative
    simple
    yet
    perfect
    I
    am falling for those lines of yours, girlie!
    and the ending is just WOW!
    Five five fiveeeeee
    and a quick fast hasty, swift nomination!

  • 11 years ago

    by LoVerSLaND

    Awesome, 3/5.

  • 11 years ago

    by Chelsey

    This is a great piece right here! That opening stanza was amazing!! I loved the use of veil, and what you were actually covering up. I like the shyness in this piece, it made me picture the face your were describing here :) Excellent!

  • 11 years ago

    by Boy

    It's the first time I get to see
    the true colors of your eyes.

    my favorite lines.. over all it is good... 4/5