A Wilted Muse

First of all, I LOVE the title! You had such a powerful ending to this poem that it made me want to read the poem a few more times to bask in the truth in your words. So many tell tales of love in their poetry but you did a great job of making it personal to you and not wrapped in general conceptions about love...

"You veil your true self
by saying all the right things
yet they sound so wrong,
but I only craved to find my fortune,
unfortunately I found you."
^I think a lot of people can relate to this stanza... I know I can. Some people are so great at making you think they're something different than they really are and we feel so betrayed and vacant when we see their true colors. Those are the people, though, that help us learn to be aware of certain characteristics in others and be quicker to pick up red flags.

Wonderfully done here, I really enjoyed it!

Everything has been said ... i thought it was a really good well thought out peice ... with your poems what i like in most i have to read twice n really dig deep to understand n then at the end it all comes together ... your talent shows through every word in this piece well done :)

This is a beautiful poem, Jenni.

The part that gets me the most is:

"The only thing that compares
to her silence is the whole world
being quite due to one sentence,
that makes heartbreaks audible."

^The message that you are trying to convey here is complex-at least for me. Are you trying to say that her silence is as noticeable, to you, as the whole world being silent? I think that is what you are trying to say. That is a good comparison because if the whole world were silent...it would be impossible not to notice. I'm just talking to myself :) sorry

As I said, this is a beautiful poem. It is like you were trying to figure her out just by watching the things she does. You put it in such a way that the reader is there right along with you.

Sorry this is a little late
Excellent
5/5

Oh holy cow, this was an amazing poem

That first Stanza, beastly.

I really can't find what to say.

This poem is so bittersweet.

I like all the imagery incorporated in it :)

5/5