Fumbling Maybes

Another great poem Jen. Although it is short that's okay, because it's what I like to call, short, sweet, and to the point. In these 6 lines of poetry you allow the reader to feel what you're feeling at the time. Missing the words of someone special? Or even yourself? Words you could use to write poetry with? IDK, but either way I've truly enjoyed this poem, keep it up!

Jenni marie sue ann!!! I had to give you middle names because this deserved a middle name yell!

Omg how did I miss this. So phenomenal! I'm literally a little taken back by this to be honest.

Your way with words Jen are like no other I've ever seen. Your opening stanza, My mouth opened!...the night, being skintight oh my word. Excellent metaphor! Like your suffocating, you need air, you need water.

Your so right, but nothing is worse than searching for them. ...having a dry mouth, lost for words sucks, but it sucks worse trying to spit out what your trying to say and can't find the words.

And your last stanza....wtffffff was that?? Just left me totally speechless Jen...for about 5 minutes. Excellent use of breed, I've never read it or thought about it that way. You should be proud of this poem. Incredible!

First up...I like your title. Fumbling seems to give the inpression of uncertaintly and maybes confirm it so I feel there was wordplay going on from the start here.

The night is skintight and my tongue is dry
because of missing words and closed lips,
but nothing is worse than searching for them;
bound in foreign sentences, resting in
bizarre mouths, that just swallow or spit.

The first line is just brilliant!...skintight....the night is smothering you and making your tongue dry but....your thirst isn't for water it's for words..be it your own (that you can't find) or words you wish to hear from another? I will say here that I wasn't too keen on the word spit...it just didn't seem poetic nor did it fit the rest of the stanza?

Muzzled because thoughts just nuzzle
my tongue instead of breed with it.

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I'm not sure about this either Jen..if you want to leave it like this then I think breed should be breeding. I've never associated thoughts nuzzling a tongue though?

I really have no idea if I am loving lots of poems lately whether because they're good or maybe because I haven't read poetry properly since a long long while... I love this piece by all means. I just love it.

Your style here is totally my type, something I wish I always find in poetry. The way you kept it short is so smart. Everything is perfect.

You started it in a direct tone...and I loved that. The metaphors are just awesome... I really haven't been so vague and speechless before. I am in love with this. Lol.

Ok. Will shut up now but believe I will come back with a comment that makes sense soon. Hope this wins. I nominated it.

I agree with hannah, the words nuzzle and muzzled together are great, it seems like an idea for a good tongue twister!!

Nice work Jenni, short but holds a lot of meaning. Nice title choice too, very unique whilst fitting to the poem.