Maneuver

This piece was a beautiful display of a lost relationship... It tossed me into a mindset and visual display of a guy and girl lost in the woods... almost like an apparition, and in the mist the girl is gone... It's heartbreaking and yet the author created such a powerful visual... the emotions can be felt the entire piece...

The title intrigues me... Its as almost if the author is saying, toss my broken heart behind your back... when really the broken heart is in front, face to face... Mercy, this was just a very creative and sad piece... Very nice!!!

Despite what others have said I still believe this be a great piece of yours and your sad poetry has always had a effect on me that always let influence me to the point of writing a poem. Anyway, this poem has a sad but hopeful outlook to it. Your telling someone to look inside and to love them for what is on the inside rather then what they can see. Or perhaps you are wanting them to realize that you are gone now and no longer part of their life, but you want them to remember you through their memories of you in their heart. Either way I am probably off on my interpretation, but I loved every part of this poem.

"Then seek me out
through the clasps
of your arms,
that plunge themselves
within my heart-
find me in yours.

But nowhere next to you."
^^^
This was a great ending and your imagery is really amazing and your emotions are deep and meaningful. Each line paints part of a picture for me and by the end I have a full painting that is beautifully written. It's true there are hints of sadness all throughout the poem but it seems as if you are also trying to encourage someone in their personal life and how they feel about you. I would have added the first section to comment on but I would have written you a epic of a comment before I was finished. I loved the imagery of the wolf venturing through the night as the cold wind blows the snow around. Your imagery, as always, is amazing.

In all, I really loved this piece and it may not be your best piece ever but it is simply amazing and full of words from your heart and has meaning and depth to it. I am glad to read your work again and be able to comment on it. I hope you continue to write and learn from it and write with more maturity, which may be impossible since your writing is already amazing. Once again great job and keep writing!!

I can see that you have found writing a little difficult of late, and I can see that there is a definite sense of sadness in here...I also find that there are alot of metaphors I cannot understand and that may just be me, but I felt like there is much you want to say but cannot say directly, if that makes sense.

I don't want to criticise this piece, and really there isn't anything too criticise, but I like this one, it's different...

x

Okay... you want my honesty ? :p

I am still waiting for you to write something like Fleeing Sands, or India, or Father, or 87, etc.... those old poems which are full of Nana.

I know there will come a time when you'll write something like that again, but not with this one....!

Regarding this, it's a great piece, not your best attempt for a long time without writing, but it's enjoyable.

I liked the 1st half more... the part of the 'wolf' is lovely!!

Well-Done... yesterday when you sent me the fcbk message I was sleeping :P sorry... now I came <3

Nana...this is awesome....it is also not fair that i dont have my nomination button ggrrrr

Seriously great write Nana as always :-)