Comments : If I could write a letter to me...

  • 11 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    ...and that would be a nice letter to have received from someone for it will lift one's spirit and leave the receiver with a smile...keep penning :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Karla

    Amreen, write me a letter like that please. Loved it.

  • 11 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    Words of praise, flowers of bliss, token of love, shades of conviction and beauty of life yes but you deserve more than that. I would really wish this letter not ending. This piece made my heart freak on excitement. Marvelous

  • 11 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    This is so so beautifully written with emphatic thoughts. Loved how you went about incorporating different aspects of life's wonders in one to paint such an exotic imagery of hope, good tidings and pleasure in one.
    You really did a job welldone with this soothing piece. Very profound in message.

    Using deeply felt lines as a basis for building each stanza. 'Words of praise', 'Flowers of bliss', Token of love, 'Shades of conviction' and 'Beauty of life'. It makes one to appreciate happy gracious moments in our lives. To spend all times in the best of ways. Perfect lines creating a heart felt message to all. A source of motivation and inspiration. This will surely make one finds peace with him/herself. It emanates love, diligence, purity, novelty, perseverance, virtue, determination and good wishes. Very articulate as usual of you.

    I really really enjoyed reading this piece, wish I could keep reading it on and on. A piece of counsel to everyone and a relatable piece.
    Nominated for sure...
    *claps*
    ;-)) ..

  • 11 years ago

    by Decayed

    I liked the idea of this, and how you said:

    "I would decorate it with the shades of conviction"

    It felt awesome.
    Lovely write, Amreen!

  • 11 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Aww.. this is a really sweet and inspiring poem. I like the idea of writing a letter to yourself... after you've learned from your experiences, so it's a way to somehow get a "do-over" in life and make yourself feel more confident and happy. This poem made me smile :)

    Great job!

  • 11 years ago

    by yogi73

    This is sweet and uplifting. What a nice message.

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This has just become one of my favourites. It's so positive and inspiring and I can't help but smile throughout the whole poem!

    I often struggle with self esteem and confidence issues and reading these words reminds me we are all amazing people and can do great things, if we would only set our minds to the task.

    The only thing I didn't like was the rhyming of love and dove, I know not many things rhyme with love and it's always difficult to find something to go with that, but it just seemed cliche somewhat to use love and dove, especially when the rest of the poem is so beautifully penned.

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    If I could write a letter to me
    I would send words of praise
    expressing my self-respect and gratitude
    in non-verbal ways.

    - oh I love this, it is nice to see someone writing a positive letter to themselves filled with all the good things!

    If I could write a letter to me
    I would parcel the flowers of bliss
    which would enlighten my ambience
    and spread the fragrance of smiles
    with its kiss.

    - this was beautifully worded with the flowers and the fragrance, it is like you are sending a big bunch of flowers to yourself. flowers can bring such happiness when recieved and like you say, it can spread so much smiles. I love the idea of the fragrance kissing - very unique.

    If I could write a letter to me
    I would gift a token of love
    which would compliment my journey
    and I could enjoy the fantasies of life like a dove.

    - again the imagery here is just so beautiful, doves represent hope and freedom and to offer this to yourself is so inspiring.

    If I could write a letter to me
    I would decorate it with the shades of conviction
    which would resurrect my vigour in turmoil
    and ribbon me times of relaxation.

    - wow you have such unique lines " shades of conviction" this is so powerful.

    If I could write a letter to me
    I would pen the beauty of life
    which would assist me
    in every walk of life.

    - inspiring ending, to keep this letter as a reminder of why you are here, what yo have been through and what is going to get you through the rest of the journey.

    This screams of confidence and hope and just very uplifting moods. Well done

  • 11 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Nice way to emphasize al the sides of life and how it is so worthwhile to us..and by making it a letter to you, you show maturity:)

    Well done!

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 11 years ago

    by NobodyKnowsItButMe

    Self-praise eeh?? Lol
    wonderful! I really love the way u put it...esp. the repetition of the lines gives the poem a new/good dimension(height)...
    Cute & sweet piece of poetry!

  • 11 years ago

    by Silent Scribbler

    Very positive and motivativating piece. Inspiring even. Very nice penmenship, it's definately one for favorates. =)

  • 11 years ago

    by Mohan

    Excellent amreen unbelievable written..

  • 11 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    If I could write like you I'd be a really happy girl. This is a very well-done poem with a lot of well-expressed emotion and up raising convince, great job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I loved your "Letters to me" this brought to mind a journal written with supernatural rhythm. Thanks for sharing

  • 11 years ago

    by Adelle

    Very well written I like the concept, a little like a message in a bottle, all the things you wish you could say to your self. It's unusual but I like your style.

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Amreen, sweets, I apologise for not reading as much of your writing lately, but on reading this, I vow to read more, because you are beautiful and this piece is so lovely to read, it is a piece of hope and love for yourself, a piece of so much soul and heart...
    the flow was flawless, and the rhymes were gentle yet perfect, you are a talent and I;ve always known it, I love your spirit friend, its wonderful, its beautiful, its you

    mwah
    xx

    • 11 years ago

      by Amreen

      Awww. Thanks a ton Tara:)
      You need not apologize. I am obliged to receive a comment from you.
      Much appreciated!

  • 11 years ago

    by Kate

    Hi Amreen. :)

    Let me start with the fact that I love how you start each stanza with the title. It gives the effect of... you're starting over with a new idea. I really like that.

    And the fact that it is a happy poem... giving praise to yourself [when most people would criticize more] is fantastic. It is nice to see a fellow Raven like this! :)

    I like the rhyme and all. Good use of vocab as well.

    "I would pen the beauty of life" is my favorite line!

  • 10 years ago

    by Love Fallacy

    I really like this whole stanza

    If I could write a letter to me
    I would pen the beauty of life
    which would assist me
    in every walk of life.

    It is a great thought of giving yourself knowledge of life. I love it!!