A love without limits

by lillie   Dec 27, 2012


Forever wondering through the places in my mind.

A picture hung so still combwebbed,
This wasnt hard to find.

Carmel like skin, with smooth chocolate eyes,

Though our feelings grow,
I spit words through my
teeth of nothing but lies.

As i wander deeper into the places in my brain

A day without talking, drives you totally insane.

I color our friendship in colors and our love in all shades of grey.

This is a friendship, and nothing more
Will i ever be able to say.

I pretend that i dont love you, the way that you love me,

But my heart keeps trying to run to you, praying that your free.

You are my best friend and thats something i cant deny for long.

You are like a melody, to my heart,
Like a beautiful love song.

So ill keep wandering through the places in my mind,

I'll wander quite deep, my heart you shall never find.

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  • 13 years ago

    by L

    Hmmm.... let's see, I'm not sure. May be this might help

    in this part where it says:

    This is a friendship, and nothing more
    Will i ever be able to say.

    It might benefit if it is like this...

    "This is a friendship and nothing more," will I ever be able to say?

    Using the quotations like you are quoting what you wish to say.

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    The next one, I think it will benefit if we take away the That... And the part about "your free" I think you meant you're free... Like this...

    "I pretend I don't love you the way you love me
    but my heart keeps trying to run to you, praying that you are free.

    I think that might help with the little rocky feeling that I got. What do you think? Aside from that, I like this piece. It's good.

  • 13 years ago

    by Amreen

    Profound and passionate!
    Keep writing(:

  • 13 years ago

    by L

    Good piece,

    This part over here sounded a bit rocky compare to the rest of the poem. It might just have been me thought.

    I pretend that i dont love you, the way that you love me,

    But my heart keeps trying to run to you, praying that your free.

    • 13 years ago

      by lillie

      What do you think I should do with that part? :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Karla

    Lovely piece!

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