Microscopic Eye [Capturing The Unseen]

I do love the word sashaying... along with hourglass and hermit.. you captured the true essence of that picture in this piece! Just beautiful!

Here is my commnet from the results:

This poem is a peculiar one; I admire the courage the author has. Especially, since this piece's prompt is based on the picture. The only part I can link to the image is the "eye." However, the title clearly states, "capturing the unseen." Therefore, the author has made the rules and is showing us what our eyes cannot see within the picture. It is creative, no doubt. Who would have thought to write about time? And to use similes such as "like the second hand on a watch," like the mute sands in a coiled hourglass," and" like a silhouette of a woman." All of those similes have a relationship in some way or another. It is quiet interesting. The tone of the poem also transitions smoothly, and the ideas seem to be connected. However, if I look at the picture and I read the poem, I feel disconnected. As much as I try to see the images depicted on the poem within the picture or vice versa, I cannot do so. What I gathered at first read from this piece is "there are things we cannot see but because we don't see them doesn't mean they are not there." In addition, if I dwell in it for too long, I find other things. My mind can't put them into words. It's abstract and I like it. I also like the effect it creates, one can picture someone observing even the tiniest of dust. It's thought provoking. Also, the ending was so fitting. Great job.

Simply brilliant.
I love how so much imagery is leaping off the screen.
I really need to read more of your poetry, you can teach us all about using words that hammer home your message. No flannel just straight to the point with this piece.

nominated.

Seriously what goes through your head
This piece is outstanding such imagery
A unique topic aswell
I don't know how but you manage to
Create the right balance
It's never to simple but
Never over complicaited , stunning

This one held my interest from start to finish. I believe it's about someone playing around with an hourglass. If I'm correct then I think it was a very interesting topic to come up with . I don't think curtains and closed doors is correct, I think they should both be singular. Also, there are 20 lines in the verse and the host asks for less than 20.