The kiss of nature (Haiku)

This is a really lovely haiku! I love haikus!

Regarding Hellon's comment, her suggestion is really good too, except that I wouldn't change anything about this haiku. I think it is awesome as it is. The element of surprise is there on the third line.

Your haikus are so lively....great write!

Onethuscome...I checked out your account and found you have never attempted a haiku so if that's all you have to say about this form then.....it's probably best you didn't comment at all?

Winter night ended
the red sun kisses this world
flowers soon wake up

Ok I love the picture you have painted in my mind with your first two lines here but...I can't remember what it's called now but your third line should make a different statement..relating to the first two...Mmm...wish I could remember but...my suggestion is this...

When winter night ends
with red sun kissing the world:
in the morn, flowers.

I think there's supposed to be an element of surprise in the third line?

Just my thoughts...

Haikus is short for "people who cant finish a poem"

Beautiful Haiku! Short but deep in meaning.