Reverie

Being a dreamer, I couldn't help but love this poem! Reverie is one of my favorite words, I just love it.

a million starbursts playing
to a mind trancended.
^Lovely lines! The starbursts really came alive, because of the previous line 'just tasting the feeling' Yum.

"Sky diving"...caught in cobwebs...

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^Skydiving sounds dizzy, like your mind has wandered & is lost yet in such a serene and lovely place. Also, not often do I see this in poetry, the motion of something written out like you have done with spinning, it's not my favorite, I feel like it makes the poem look a bit odd, but I can completely understand why you use it. It's different.

Ooo I may have to listen to the song! The title sounds so inspiring. Very beautiful piece!

Floating on a downy cloud
of rainbow coloured dreams
drifting to a higher place
where nothing's how it seems.

- very descriptive opening, it sets the tone as quite relaxed and easy and makes the reader just want to hop on board and join you in this place. I like the flow of it and how you can actually feel yourself lifting higher as you describe going higher. I also like the last line because it is such a fitting line to so many things in life, that not everything appears as it is. It is a line that makes you have deep thoughts.

"Just tasting the Feeling"

- Wow, this made me think of Skittles, and how your opening stanza would tatse if I was to put a flavour on them. Rainbow coloured skittles :) I love these two senses being mixed, very powerful for your poem.

Gliding through the universe
above the world suspended
a million starbursts playing
to a mind trancended.

- tee hee, ok, starbursts instead of skittles then. I love how you continued this peacefulness into this stanza and kept the rhyme which is only subtle but makes the poem flow so smoothly.

"Sky diving"...caught in cobwebs...

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- I really like this part ( lay out wise ) because I could not imagine the poem if you had just put spinning as one word on its own. I think it also could represent that fall of coming back down from this place, like coming back to reality.

in a dream like state
from which I never want to wake
the world looks better when opaque
right now.......

- I really like that you created this place first before the changed tone of needing to escape something or the world. I think we all have this place we can go to and I love your description through out. Great addition of the word opaque I think it really emphasises how dark reality can be sometimes.

Loved this one too. Very creative.

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What a captivating day dream...
imagery is enchanting, I quite happily got lost in your words.

Nicely penned missy :)

Hellon, I am totally in love with this write, the flow was so smooth, it felt really dreamy and the whole scenery was beautiful and really captivating.

I love the way you added the original quotes in, and how the poem was centred around them but they didn't draw away from the whole piece, they just added a mystery and intrigue to the piece.

Really loved the whole feel of this write, dear

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