You're never alone

by Robert   Mar 27, 2013


I believe in a place
Much different than I know
Can I find your grace
Digging deep within your soul

I have lost my faith
This disappointment seems to grow
Will I find this place
Even when I am standing all alone

Theres a feeling deep inside us
A sharpened blade that we call hope
Breaking all the door's that we must
To walk on down the road
Can I make it till the end of time
Just to hold you very close
Can I change your views in life
as we sail across the coast

I am sinking very deep
You take my breath away
My heart is given, something to keep
as we surf the oceans waves

In search of a place
Much different than I know
I search our world, every portion
Because now Im not alone

For theres a feeling deep inside us
A sharpened blade that we call hope
Breaking all the doors that we must
To walk on down that road
Can I make it till the end of time
Just to hold you very close
I hope that we will eventually see
The place where we must go

That place is right next to me, and ill hold you up
when you're alone

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  • 12 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    This poem is very encouraging, I really enjoyed reading it, fabulous job!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    I blame the double and triple post on bad connection.

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    That place is right next to me, and ill hold you up
    when you're alone

    ^^This is the ending,

    I would suggest a "where" instead of "and"

    like this:

    That place is right next to me, where I'll hold you up
    when you're alone

    or

    That place is right next to me, where I'll hold you up
    whenever you feel alone.

    P.S ... Only the author knows what is best for their pieces so feel free to ignore my suggestions.

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    For theres a feeling deep inside us
    A sharpened blade that we call hope
    Breaking all the doors that we must
    To walk on down that road
    Can I make it till the end of time
    Just to hold you very close
    I hope that we will eventually see
    The place where we must go

    ^ This is one of my favorite parts

    I think it should be "there's" instead of theres

    In my opinion, the ending needs a bit more of work. A little bit of punch to make it stanza more.

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