Moth

Lovely imagery and a nice little piece of writing.

This is good. Good first and last line - the important stuff is there. I think, though, it could improve with some paring. The poem could be laid even barer and starker for greater impact. A short poem like this needs to pack that punch, so make every word count.

You are portraying the moth as a delicate but modest, unassuming, and lonely creature. So forget the silken wings, that says the opposite. 'Unadorned' is a great word because it inherently implies that you are comparing it to an adorned butterfly. So forget that extraneous line. This also makes the reference to peacock colours unnecessary- these colours clash with the dark and fragile atmosphere anyway. Your title is Moth which already lets the reader know what the poem is about.

So now the poem is left with something more haiku-like:

Moth

Under the streetlight, dancing
unadorned in the darkness, a flutter
like a tiny heartbeat, just
a breath on the wind.

Sorry for giving you such a prescriptive critique, I can't help myself when I see such a beautifully clear image and lots of potential. Just my opinions, feel free to take all or none of it. Keep it up, look forward to more from you!

I agree with Tony to fix that little line, 'on' doesn't really fit there. Moths can dance on their own wings, lol.

But ewww, I hate moths so much!!!! They attack me because they know I hate them, lol.

But I do like this little piece here, describing them fluttering by the streetlights! Great imagery! especially with the touch of peacock colors!

What a great little piece gives such a lot of images.

dancing On silken wings???

This little bit here to me doesn't
Sound write ON wings... I dunno
If you mean it differently but I would
Of said it was there wings rather than
Them on them. Or if they With more
Among wings .

Something like that lol

Great piece