Wheel Bound (collab)

Beautiful Poem.

The detail given throughout this piece is superb/ Beautifully written, too.

Judge Comment:

These two ladies took me to a place in my own memories and touched me deeply, I do like it when I read a poem, that it can give me goosebumps and take me to memories of my own, that is hard for an author to do, and yet 2 authors collaborating is outstanding! These ladies need to write together more often, I look forward to reading more.

I was impressed with out it starts out as a traveling memory of a woman needing to escape, the visionary display was beautiful. I could vision an open road to a brighter future, but what got me was the twist in the end... the darkness of looking back...

this stanza blew me away:

"Knowing all this,
believing this was her chance to escape,
she stared at her wax consistent house, that
he burnt down, and smelled the aroma
of pure hatred. Glued to its memories, its
hope, its once picturesque persona, she
left those tires still, she let the engine die."

I can't express how much this ending stanza sealed the deal for me on my 10 choice. This entire poem is outstanding, heart gripping and could easily be song material... Truly adore this piece!! Well Done Chelsey and MaryAnne

Its awesome how you two blended your emotions together and created this master piece. Really powerful!!
Great job you two hope to see more collabs by you:)

Well, hello bad-ass collabers! :)
I am in love with this, ugh. I've read it so many times and fall deeper each time. It's got everything a top-notch poem is supposed to have. Added to my favorites.

I love how you singled the opening out... it gives that anticipation, making the reader want to go to the next line to find out what is going to happen.

First stanza: The imagery is absolutely astounding here... down to the exact model of her car, the amount of change, unmarked road map. The desperation to just get away shines here, she wants to leave quickly, as long as she's got enough to get out of the city, she's figure the rest out later. The need to leave is NOW... and it makes the reader wonder, why now? Why so urgent, what did he do, what did she do, etc. I like how the details aren't given but yet the reader knows her emotions so well.

This poem has a "Safe Haven" by Nicholas Sparks feel to it... her leaving an abusive relationship, quickly in the night so he doesn't catch her... that hope to start fresh, begin another life without abuse.

Second stanza: She was being suffocated, maybe physically and emotionally. She couldn't breathe fresh air around him, constantly afraid of making him mad perhaps. I love the constrast of delicate imprints and manacles... that at once point, the beginning of the relationship... he had seemed loving but in the end, he wrapped his limbs around her and wouldn't let go...controlling her, etc.

"let's see where this will take us" -- this is so relatable to so many people because many relationships start off with this exact line... like the why not, let's give it a try... something simple but turns out into a nightmare.

Ending: This ending... wow! You think she is taking a stand towards moving on, leaving this hell behind... but yet knowing all the torture she endures, all the suffering... behind all that, she still loves him, she still cherishes all the good memories they once had...she believes that things will get better... she doesn't find the strength to move those ties, she's bound to him... so she turns the ignition off.

So many relationships are like this, it's sad really... but that little glimmer of hope that things will change keeps them there... that maybe today will be the day that he will show her the man he used to be, the man she fell in love with.

Once again, love this... I need to see more from you two! <3