I saw the crescent moon
like an orphan child in winter;
shivering and trembling
as if reaching for her knees
to grasp a blanket of stars
upon her fragile skeleton,
and then, as time passed by,
curled up like an embryo
to become a full moon.
This has got to be; Hands down, one of my all time favorite nature poems to date! What a gorgeous poem by Everlasting!
The first line sunk me in... Orphan child references to describe the feelings of the moon, along with blanket stars.. just an incredible and detailed way of writing here.. The metaphor to describe the phases of the moon is truly breathtaking.
To top it off, its written in such a small piece with a magical message, Visually detailed and beautiful wording... !!!
The title got me all a thinking, This is almost a one line poem on its own. Such a delicate and miraculous object juxtaposed against the vastness that is the know universe. That is before we even read the poem. I love line two, I thought line one wasn't very unusual on its own. I have probably read similar lines many times but linked to line two it works and is a winner. It shows real imagination and attention to detail. It also pitches the tone of this piece tremendously.
There is real powerful imagery throughout this piece, 'Fragile skeleton' and 'blanket of stars' the two stand outs for me. What Everlasting has down has crammed a huge story (with real emotion lifted from a snapshot in time) into a small and detailed piece. Worthy 10 pointer.