An Embryo in the Universe

by Everlasting   Apr 16, 2014


I saw the crescent moon
like an orphan child in winter;
shivering and trembling
as if reaching for her knees
to grasp a blanket of stars
upon her fragile skeleton,
and then, as time passed by,
curled up like an embryo
to become a full moon.

Written by: Lucero L.

March 31, 2013

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  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    This has got to be; Hands down, one of my all time favorite nature poems to date! What a gorgeous poem by Everlasting!

    The first line sunk me in... Orphan child references to describe the feelings of the moon, along with blanket stars.. just an incredible and detailed way of writing here.. The metaphor to describe the phases of the moon is truly breathtaking.
    To top it off, its written in such a small piece with a magical message, Visually detailed and beautiful wording... !!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Darren

    Judges comments

    The title got me all a thinking, This is almost a one line poem on its own. Such a delicate and miraculous object juxtaposed against the vastness that is the know universe. That is before we even read the poem. I love line two, I thought line one wasn't very unusual on its own. I have probably read similar lines many times but linked to line two it works and is a winner. It shows real imagination and attention to detail. It also pitches the tone of this piece tremendously.
    There is real powerful imagery throughout this piece, 'Fragile skeleton' and 'blanket of stars' the two stand outs for me. What Everlasting has down has crammed a huge story (with real emotion lifted from a snapshot in time) into a small and detailed piece. Worthy 10 pointer.

  • 5 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Simply gentle and beautiful!! Congratulations on a well deserved win my dear :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Karla

    This is gorgeous, Luce. What a great tribute to Mother Moon.

  • 5 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Oh so glad this one, I just adore this poem so much! Congrats