Oh I got so excited reading this poem from you I nearly choked on my coffee!! Very excited to read a new piece from you!!
This was beautiful... I adore the word "hush" as a break in your poem... that was elegant! truly a beautiful piece!!!
8 years ago
I love the flow of this and the style, your voice is so unique, now I really want to read much more of your poetry. Its an amazing piece. Really it is. You used to prompts so perfectly, the piece was so effortless, but so wonderful. I like how you don't use punctuation, it feels , ore simple, more raw that way. And your style makes up for it. I really really enjoy how the piece overflows with skills, amazing skills.
5/5 of course
8 years ago
This poem really made me think which is a greattt yhing.
The first stanza I feel really makes the poem shine. We truly all want someone to make us feel safe so thr monster under the twist no one expects. Nights are always cold no matter what especially if you feel alone. I also like the love twist as you no longer yearn fot anyone as you love someone already. Then the third twist in the metaphor suicide of the love you once felt but no longer have. This person whom you loved hurt you and that is horrible because a heart is not something to be played with.I loved all the stanzas as they flow so well together. The imagery plays in my head so well as you describe everything in detail. Excellent. 5