A Child's Hidden Agenda

Judging Comment:

A short narrative packed with action and emotions!
It felt like I was running along with the child and
the imagery just springs forth with pain and breath
taking emotions.

What makes this write even better are the eye
catching lines for instance:

Bushes quivering to barks,
as footsteps splash fear into walls,

His shirt soaked with adrenaline
All for the sake of sprinting
the long walk to freedom.
Excellent piece of work here and wish I could give out more points!!

Very well written.

The line
His shirt soaked with adrenaline
the gushing energy and want beautifully depicted.

Very nice! I love how short you kept this, yet it's the fast tone like the reader is inside the chase that's going on.

I loved your line:
As footsteps splash fear into walls...

That is just an awesome line that stands right out and will be remembered.

Great descriptions, well done.